Far Out There

Okay, SOME of this page is a side effect of me condensing more material into fewer pages, forcing Astrid to just narrate things that would have been better served by actually showing… but there’s also some basic story issues here that would be weird no matter how many pages I had left at this point.  We probably shouldn’t know that Astrid’s figured out as much as she has just yet.  Even with all the lampshade hanging in her narration and the active holding back of a payoff, the order of events just feels wrong.  Really, we should have seen her mysteriously pick SOMETHING out of the mug, then drop it off to SOMEBODY, but we only find out what it was later.  Ya know, to build up more intrigue and keep all the revelations for the climax.  But again, there’s the fact that I’ve only got 25 pages to do all of this.  Even if I did have the time to TRY to re-work the material, I’d probably still be stuck with big globs of narration instead of actual on-screen action.  See, if you ever wonder why Far Out There normally sprawls out into such long, meandering story-telling, it’s because I fear that condensing things will result in more complaining like this.  And, you know, the fact that I cant go back and rewrite pages that have already gone out either way.